Hey guys, this is my first time doing anything like this, I hope you like it. Any constructive criticism is welcome. If you guys like it, I hope to do more with these characters. I'd like to loosely follow the story of the original game, just embellished a bit. It's a bit of a long read, but I think it's worth it. Thanks for reading! :)
(Also, sorry that it has to be linked, it's too long to fit in less than a million forum posts, and that's just a hassle. For both you and me.)
[url]https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Aqsp02IvYmD70eWHhOmrflxscWpJ9PIHuImKh33pYM8/edit?usp=sharing[/url]
[EDIT] Working on Part 2. I will post a link in this thread when it's done, but I'd appreciate a like or bump in the dedicated thread when it appears. Thanks. :)
[EDIT] Here's Part 2: http://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/81390687
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Edited by ChinNationFTW: 1/26/2015 2:58:09 AMCan Someone animate this or do live action...I hate reading...
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Please tell me there will be a part 3, and 4, and 5, and...well you get it
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Just wanted to tell you, I am making a thread to compile Destiny fanfictions and I want to include these two. Also, it took me a bit to find it again, but damn it was worth it. Such a good narrative!
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Edited by Neri: 12/1/2014 1:03:16 AMWait what is dove? A girl? boy? What race? I wanna know!!!! Excellent story loved it
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It's great! I think if you tighten it a little and cut down some unnecessary parts, it would turn out better!
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Very nice story. You definitely got the talent, I think you just need some more practice/experience. But this was already a very good story and really enjoyed reading it! (But why Bladedancer though, I love the knife but Gunslinger has one too you know ;-P Mind you, the last is pure personal preference so it does not lower the quality of your story in any way.)
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PLEASE keep working on this. This may be the best fan fic I´ve read about this game thus far. I´ve tried making some of my own and man, I´m nowhere near your level. And you managed the impossible: you made me feel interested about a Ghost! Cool thing that you gave it a female personality, and you also captured the stress of what our escape from Old Russia would have been. Congratulations!
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No way I'll read all that!
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Over all I enjoyed it very much. Good job!!! It seem to take me back to old memories lol.
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very good
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When you mke the next story put the link to it on this post
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You need to tone the language down on it. Also, you need to add variety into your vocabulary.