JavaScript is required to use Bungie.net

OffTopic

Surf a Flood of random discussion.
Edited by Phosphor: 9/26/2014 1:36:08 AM
11

A Monster Calls, A poem. (Vapor)

In a town not so far away, there is a house not so small. Near that house, a monster calls. In that house, there is a boy named James, James has heard the call. The monster's call. The monster says "Hello James, how have you been?" As James tries to sleep, he hears the call. That mysterious monster's call. James says, "I don't like you monster, go away please" The monster says "But James, you've been as busy as a bee." "Open the door when you hear my call" James waits and sleeps, but he hears a call, the monster's call. "Go away monster! I don't want to see you now!" The door opens, James once again hears the monster's call. James runs up against the wall. But you cannot hide from the Monster's call. What did you think? :D

Posting in language:

 

Play nice. Take a minute to review our Code of Conduct before submitting your post. Cancel Edit Create Fireteam Post

View Entire Topic
  • Edited by Masque of Night: 9/26/2014 1:43:46 AM
    It's not bad, but i'm not very fond about how disproportionate the lines are from one another at times. It just throws the piece off in my opinion, but that's just a matter of personal preference. My apologies if I sound like a critic, but i'm only as honest as i'd like people to be with me about my own work.

    Posting in language:

     

    Play nice. Take a minute to review our Code of Conduct before submitting your post. Cancel Edit Create Fireteam Post

    2 Replies
    You are not allowed to view this content.
    ;
    preload icon
    preload icon
    preload icon