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Sorry for the delay, but here is Chapter 13. The biggest chapter yet. Both in length and plot content. Enjoy the read and thank you for the feedback.
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[b]Announcement: Chapter 13 is revised.[/b]
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Most definitely your biggest (best) chapter yet. I half saw that little bout of infighting coming though I thought it would take a few more word between them. Tharsos' fury is a dangerous thing no matter its target isn't it? Lukos ever the loner; only natural for [i]him[/i] to have an issue with being saved. The teams' retreat worked out rather well thanks to the 'turn and fire' moments. Now it's obvious the Fallen Admiral set Lukos up as part of a trap, but how has his rescue affected the plan? How will these events impact the team going forward? How will Lukos repay everyone for saving his ungrateful hide? Does Sideros view Tharsos any differently after this risky rescue mission? Please tell me something will be answered next time.
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Best chapter so far. It was kinda astounding.
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Truly, this is your best chapter yet. Sideros' insensitiveness towards Lukos (as a team member) was a surprise. The Fallen Phillistine's attempt to eliminate Sachal was a surprise as well. Also, the information revealed at the end of the first fire team Sachal was a treat. Oh, and before I forget, the fight between Sideros and Tharsos...going to be honest, had a feeling that was coming, but it remains...does he feel responsible for what happend to Tharsos father or does he just want to to prove how tough and strong his will is?