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Prosper- Chapter 1: The Lies We Tell
I got enough positive feedback from the preview that I decided to finish it. Here it is! The beginning of Prosper.
And I'm bringing back the audience questions! Yay!
[spoiler]Do you like the intro?
Who was talking during the intro?
Do you like Kyjor?
Do you like Antom?
What's your opinion of Dartol?
Or Chenford?
What the hell happened in the Removement Chamber?
So Dartol's MIA...huh?
Chenford's mission tanked fast. What did you think happened?[/spoiler]
"Hurry, daddy. I want to see the Gaurdians."
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1 ReplyI loved it! Here's some constructive feedback. 1 more description 2 more careful introduction to the characters so the reader feels familiar with them 3 more explanation on the scene I have to admit you did the above pretty well but needed a little more. I liked the idea and where the story was heading to though.
