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originally posted in:The Black Garden
Edited by Pheonix:
6/24/2013 3:58:10 AM
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My Destiny fiction (work in progress)
hello, I'm kind of new to this group, so excuse me if I don't know how things work here. I just got finished writing (most of) the first chapter of my first fiction, and would like some critique from the community here before I take it to the public forums.
[url]https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zhbdDL8FhfFMk5qwczncz9dAQnbfbH1Fv7IQM3awDCY/pub[/url]
Don't be afraid to say it's bad, but please be courteous. [i]Thank you.[/i]
(sorry I don't have a proper title yet)
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Welcome to the garden! Your story is actually really good. There are a few grammatical errors, but most are just uncapitalized letters. But story wise, it's really good. I'm very eager to see what happens next. Just be sure to be as descriptive as possible. You had some nice descriptions, but you can definitely improve on it. But I really want to know what happens next. The story looks really interesting. Once again, welcome to the garden. I look toward to reading your work
