As what most people have been saying, the music is too loud and IMO, not even needed. If you wanted to play something a little slower paced, that would be cool, but even with lower volume, the fast-paced music is a huge distraction. As for the analysis, try to stay away from saying things that we can see directly on screen. For example: at the 5 minute mark you say the Cabals have shields that they use to protect themselves and deflect bullets. I think most people know what a shield is, you don't really need to explain that kind of stuff.