[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] pinksphinx13 you should maybe get a someone to proof read it first, there were some parts that might have been described alittle better[/quote] That was me, but he stopped sending me chapters before posting them. And anyway... [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Wolverfrog With luck that shouldn't happen with this. [i]True Sangheili[/i] has been a lot less spontaneously written than Insurrection; I've had a cohesive plot planned out since about the tenth part. [/quote] It definitely shows, this story has a much better flow than Insurrection.