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Edited by IronJak24: 9/22/2022 5:18:37 PMI’m just wondering when The Guardian is gonna show up and blow everything to hell. Sweet story so far
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The title reminds of the interesting story of a past season I enjoyed, you write wonderfully Shadow...
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Tried reading this from the bottom up. Surprisingly works well both ways.
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[quote]Panicked eliksni bump and jostle against her from all sides. She feels as though she’s wading through a swamp, the water slowing her, weeds tangling her legs and feet and pulling her down, down into the deep— Seeing Variks is like breaking the surface. Taking in a lungful of sweet, beautiful air.[/quote] This is one of my favorite parts. You mentioned how much extra study you did to make this scene accurate and you more than succeeded! The callbacks to the fall of Riis, Variks being lost while having to live the experience a second time, all very very good. It's all at once sad and sweet that Shadow has to be the one to drag him back from the brink.
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First! Your ability to write emotion and love is incredible! Two thumbs up!
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Great as always Shadow! Always nice to see your posts :)