Sorry man. It will be finished some other time; I got school this week.
Well, tomorrow is off, so maybe I can finish it tomorrow...?
Here:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YVJeEKem2vPuQPjM5lF5PwjX2R-y8ECXheRXZEuByV4/edit?usp=drivesdk
Night!
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Some words advise. You need to add more details, I can barely tell what's happening. Add descriptions of every scene, from multiple characters points of view if you want. It goes by too fast, you need to pace it out a little more and more content. Add more intensity, which can be achieved by adding more details.