[spoiler]don't roast me please[/spoiler]
Chapter one first life
[b]A[/b] ghost is flying through an old bray facility when it finds a room hidden under four feet off concrete and steel.
After a few minutes of searching she finds the access panel. Once in side the ghost picks up a potential light bearer. While scanning she sees a jagged piece of metal protruding from behind a large crate.
She barely manages to shift the crate,underneath lay the twisted,rusted form of an EXO. The ghost's shell twirls and spins excitedly. Thank the traveler I finally found my guardian!
She funnels light into the EXO's body
and watches as the crushed frame miraculously becomes whole again.
The EXO slowly blinks awake,[i]where,where am I.[/i] You're on Mars you've been dead for a very long time.
[i]Dead[/i] what do you mean dead? Who,what are you?! I'm a ghost I brought you back. What do you mean brought me back? None of this makes sense!
Okay look,you're a guardian now and I'm your ghost. I've been looking for you for a long time. Why'd you choose to bring me back then,why am I so special? You have a connection with the light,witch is how I found you.
Look we need to get you to the city there's people there who can help. But we'll need a ship first. A ship? The EXO asks. Why well let's just say the city's pretty far away.
Thanks for reading this was completely unscripted so I guess let the hate flow : }pm
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Not bad, you’ve got potential. Highly recommend you take time to read through it after typing it but before posting it and get any punctuation fixed (like spaces after comas). Oh, and try to separate different peoples dialogue, or just say who’s sayin’ what.