[quote][i]Legends, stories scattered through time. Mankind has grown quite found of recounting the stories of heroes and villains, forgetting so easily that we are remnants, byproducts of a-[/i][/quote] solid intro [quote]*Badger yells from across the room* “Wrong story dipshit![/quote] Flip this, get rid of the garbage asterisks, throw in an extra “ and suddenly you’re writing at a fourth grade level. [quote]“I actually liked it” Squirrel said shyly “No one cares” sighed Badger “I’m sorry guys, I’ve been staying up to late” said Shprang. [/quote] For the love of Christ, please learn how to punctuate things. Please. Also, Google “To” then Google “Too” and you might as well Google “Two [quote]Vex yells “what the hell is happening in here!” [/quote] If he really wanted to know, maybe he’d have used one of these -> ? [quote] “I don’t really know, I was just trying to act cool” said Shprang. “I know, that’s the problem.” Said Badger “I actually liked it until Badger fućked it up” said Sol, turning off his Cloak.[/quote] what the -blam!- is this dialogue? [quote]“Holy shit your really creepy, you know that Sol?” Said Badger, scanning around the room for more hidden people.[/quote] I’ll ignore the absolutely stellar comedy and world building to point out the glaringly obvious [i]your[/i]. It’s not -blam!-ing hard. [quote]“I’m proud of it” sneered Sol *Badger flashes Sol the Middle Finger* “No u” says Sol. As Sol says this, Shprang sighs “ we are motherfućking Pilots for God’s sake, why can’t we get along.” “Because Sol is a idiot” says Badger. “Because Badger is a fućking simpleton” Says Sol. “Because I have nothing better to do” remarks Vex.[/quote] seriously what the -blam!- am I reading? [quote]“Because I want to spend as much time as I can in this air-conditioned ship as possible, and not down their in that desert hellscape down there” complains Badger [quote]not down their [quote]their[/quote][/quote][/quote] ur taking the -blam!-ing piss [quote]“Wrap it in ladies, we should probably go” Inquires Artemis.[/quote] -blam!- me, wrap it in? Jesus Christ. [quote]“Hades is fućking hell, no doubt about it. But it is our mission, and we most uphold it” says Ajax.[/quote] lmao [quote]“He has a point” adds Vex.[/quote] lmfao [quote]“Ajax, you are going to first person to die I hope you know that. You are way to patriotic.” Says Badger [quote]to[/quote][/quote] ... [quote]*VPHammer looks up from the book he’s reading* “Ajax has a nice argument. Do you know what else is nice? This book. So please shut up before I get an aneurysm”[/quote] speaking of aneurysms [quote]Everyone: “FINE”[/quote] Why do these trained professionals who kill people for a living have the temperament of spoiled toddlers? [quote]*as everyone gets up, you can see the living hell going on Hades from the viewport* You get used to it at this point.[/quote] Not to gripe but maybe you could, I don’t know, [i]-blam!-ing describe it[/i].