A sad guardian was flying to mercury as a part of his weekly routines, and all of a sudden there was a big tear in the sky. Guardian's ship lost its control and switched to manual mode. Being a newbie at flying ships, he did his best to gain control over the drift in tear. He managed to escape death by crashing into a pool of vex mind fluid. This had a lot of impact on his physical abilities, inventory, ghost, ship and sparrow.
Somehow ghost managed to pull him out of the ship along with his sparrow and went silent all of a sudden, no response.
Guardian opened his eyes after a long sleep - due to crash/concussion and couldn't believe what he saw around him. His ghost was lying on the floor with a tiny spark of life left, far from his location was his broken exotic sparrow. He recovered quickly out of the shock and started to analyze the location. Without ghost around him, he is so clueless.
Guardian started to pick few items he can carry around him including ghost, glimmer, few shards, and ripped dual exhaust out of his broken sparrow. Staring at the closing tear in sky he decided to find any help nearby and payback whoever did this to him.
After a long wander in the open lands he passed by digital rocks, shape shifting platforms, spooky trees and found some tracks of vex mind fluid leading him into a small cave covered under mechanical debris. Without any weapons he was very hesitant to peek in but dared to get whatever is waiting there. To his surprise there is a weird looking vex object bleeding vex fluid out of it, whispering ghost, ghost, your ghost.
Greedy guardian though that this is a friendly vex asking support from his ghost and decided to pull it out of his carry on and realized that there is no light left in there, but pulled it out hesitating. There is a small flicker of light and the ghost was sucked into the vex object forming a shield around it.
"Ghost", "Hey ghost!", "Ghosttt" yelling out at the vex object, he realized he lost his ghost. He tried to punch the shield but he is so fragile without the power of light. Deceived by vex again, he felt like quitting the game. But the truth is he was stuck within an unknown location and the chance of returning to elsewhere is 0. After multiple quit attempts he decided to inspect the object again but the RNG luck is not favorable as always with his destiny.
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Good job. You effectively described everything that was happening, but it all seemed rushed and abrupt, like you were jumping from one thing to the next. You should try putting more attention into describing what's happening and making everything flow together. I hope to read more!