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Edited by HappyLine: 6/18/2016 2:57:12 AM
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I made a story.

A+ ~ Great writing, characters, etc.

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A- ~ Great story, but a couple flaws.

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B+ ~ Good, but there are some problems.

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B- ~ Alright; there's some points need fixing.

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C ~ Eh. That's all.

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D ~ What a waste of time.

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F ~ Why.

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I made a poll a couple months ago for people of the Destiny community to review a little series that I am making with a friend. It's called [u]Destiny: Underground[/u], and I got the idea from a dream I had. So the first time I published it and shared in on the Destiny forums, I was met with slightly positive reviews, but it didn't feel good. The story was confusing, messy, and overall just plain dull. I decided to redo it with my friend, and now it's back to chapter 1. Let me know what you think by answering the poll! [b]Please grade appropriately and honestly. This information is extremely important to me.[/b]

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  • It was a fun read, but there was something about the flow that didn't quite sit right. Also, it's easy to see the personalities of the titan and warlock, but your hunter is too much of a black box. It's probably been noted already, but proofread and have someone else do it for you too. The grammar was a little shot in a couple spots.

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