I'm not finished, but this is what I have so far. I'm also not 100% sure if I want it to be a black metal song as I was singing it in more of a thrash/death metal style today and kind of liked it more.
Anyhue, here it is (and I'm ready for the brutal, soul crushing honesty and criticism) so have at it.
[spoiler][i]Running blind through the forest
I am at the summit
The wolves, they cometh
For they know thine blood runneth
They're on my trail
I wake to their embrace
Cold Winter's kiss
Lieth upon my face
I sleep, I weep
I fear my imminent doom
Standing there, in my petrified state
I see him stare
Sealing my chthonic fate
I writhe, I try
Wishing not to die
He pulleth me under
Asking me "but why?"
Then shows me the dark light
The night, I see
A black winter cometh
Waiting for me
Her cold embrace, a fear it lit
But I still want it.[/i][/spoiler]
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Just put Moms Spaghetti in every line and people will love you and your music.
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Not bad not bad
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On a scale of 1 to Spaghetti i give it North Korea (which means its pretty bad)
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Ill rate your life=0/10 Quit being emo and go make some friends
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Add a chorus / repeat section and separate them into verses
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Its not black metal. But thrash metal and death might work. It would work better if you sang it in a slower tone. Like behemoth.
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I wouldn't call this black metal. But... it's not a badthrash/power metal song.
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It's too much to read...
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Spit fire.
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And btw... Not shitty bro. Do what makes you happy
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[quote]Black metal[/quote] Stopped right there. Too much cringe
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Honestly, reading black metal lyrics is the only way you'll know they're even speaking a human language.