This is chapter 1 of my first destiny fanfiction feel free to leave comments at the bottom
The characters
Charlie "Bullseye" Wolfe:
Male human Hunter
Caucasian
Blonde hair
Blue eyes
Somehow became a nightstalker this early
violent on duty, calm, fun off duty
Gears
Male Exo Titan
Blue "skin"
Orange "eyes"
Somehow a sunbreaker, I don't Even know how at this point
Kind, friendly, slow on the uptake
Violet Everton
Female awoken warlock
Light blue skin
Purple hair
Violet eyes
Somehow a stormcaller. (I have an advanced group eh?)
Very wise, hard to anger, compassionate
"Guardian... Guardian, eyes up guardian"
Charlie "Bullseye" Wolfe woke up with a strange little orb in his face... He looked at it quizzically, wondering what the heck that thing was.
"Hello, guardian? Are you ok? Because we need to be going, NOW!"
Charlie still didn't reply to the extremely loud orb right in front of him
Sigh* "It's gonna be one of those days isn't it... Ok, well I'm your ghost, and you've been dead a long time... But I know what your thinking, and I am not the kind of ghost that haunts people." Said his ghost.
Charlie heard chattering in the distance, followed by a rail gun firing at his head... Which missed.
"What the hell was that?! It could've taken off my head! Where the heck am I?" Charlie asks his ghost.
His ghost responded, "you are in an old cosmodrome in Russia, and that WAS supposed to take your head off. So I would suggest getting away from here and to that wall."
Charlie immediately starts sprinting to the wall. Inside the wall his ghost leads him to a gun, an old khovstov, from before the collapse.
Suddenly dregs appear everywhere.
"What are these things?! And why the heck do they have Mohawks?" Asks Charlie
Charlie shoots all of the dregs and advances to a clearing where he sees two other guardians struggling over an engram on the ground. One was a male Exo Titan named Gears, the other was a female awoken Warlock named Violet. Bullseye approached the two wrestling for the engram
"What are you doing?" Asks Charlie confused.
Violet responds, "he's trying to take the rare engram, even though I found it!"
Gears responds with, "She said I could have the next engram that dropped!"
They both continue wrestling for control over it until Gears gets hit with a full shrapnel blast from a captain five levels above them all. Violet takes the engram for herself and proceeds to revive Gears.
"Run!", Charlie yells!
The trio takes off and finds the archon, barely killing it with their combined firepower. Charlie used his sniper to give cover fire, while Gears took out the adds with his shotgun. Violet used her fusion rifle to keep a continuos drain on the archons health... Then things went south, Charlie ran out of ammo, no longer able to stun the archon, it was able to take out Gears, who was in close proximity to him. Violet then rushed in to revive her fallen comrade, barely escaping after reviving Gears. Charlie then luckily finished off the archon while he was distracted with a well placed grenade. They decide to from a fire team and to meet up back at the tower
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Violet is decoding the rare engram and ends up finding a shotgun, which the cryptarch brings out of his tent, no longer bored... Well he probably is still bored. Violet gives it to Gears, as it is rightfully his. Meanwhile Charlie is sitting in the Hunter lounge sharpening his knife and running through possible names for his ghost, "how about Phil?" His ghost only shakes his head. "No? Okay, what about... exploding ball of furry? Or maybe little light?" "Don't call me that," his ghost says irritated. "Ok how about... Shifter?" His ghost approves his new name and stores his name in his memory. Violet and Gears come in and startle Charlie, causing him to cut himself with his own knife.
"Why would you do that?! Now it's gonna bleed all over my cloak!" Charlie whined at them.
"Pfft, cloaks are for chumps, Titan marks are where it's at." Gears retorted.
"You guys are lucky, all I get is a metal band around my arm." Violet said.
"Well, at least your super isn't throwing a tantrum and bashing the floor in." Gears said.
"So how did you guys find each other?" Charlie asks them both.
"Well, I was just heading to my objective when Gears killed a vandal and the engram dropped from it was "accidentally" picked up by me, so we made a deal that the next engram to drop was Gears's, and so we stuck together to make sure he got his engram." Said Violet.
"I see that worked out," sarcastically said Charlie, reminding all of them of the wrestling over the blue engram.
"Guys I've got a great idea! We should have some sort of home base together," suggested Gears excitedly.
"Sure," replied Violet
"The vanguard would probably be able to set up a base for us, I've heard that another fire team has something like that for them," Charlie says.
To be continued...
Also I got inspiration from Fiji, and Snarkii's fan-fictions
Chapter index
Index: https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/159707322/0/0
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It's good, but you might want to slow it down a bit, add more detail and try to show it from your main character's point of view
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What OutsideRocket said; but other than that, I think its good!
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I like the little abridged vanilla story. A tip from me, if you would like one is this:don't tell us the name of the other characters, have the main character learn it with the reader.
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Not bad, I like this as a start I'll read the rest later on. Keep it up
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The next 3 chapters are out now
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Yes! Keep going! You are doing wonderfully so far, building character relationships. Be more descriptive, take time to explain. It will make it more realistic and relatable.
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Soo... You're telling me... After Charlie's resurrection, he already has some firepower and firearms... A bit weird, right?