Chapter 1
The ghost continued to buzz and beep beside Arauro’s head “Guardian?” It said in a gentle feminine voice. “Are you sleeping?” She asked, already knowing the answer
“No ghost. Exos do not sleep… at least I don’t remember us being able to” He said as his eyes parted. They were in orbit above the tower, waiting to be docked. “Ghost, begin audio diary” With a whir and a click, Arauro knew she was ready “My name is Arauro-13. I don’t remember anything before the collapse. My ghost says she found me within the dead zone of Dublin. As with many guardians, I don’t remember my life. I only remember there being one… though I’m sure that more as knowing than remembering. For the one who finds the recording, know I am an Exo Titan and my job is to protect anyone and everyone at all costs. If this is found after I have perished, know that I was ensuring another’s safety” he finished then turned to the ghost “End recording” Soon after he was granted clearance for landing.
Upon arriving in the tower, Arauro was called by the vanguard for an unknown mission. The moment Arauro entered, the doors of the vanguard closed behind him. Arauro turned back to the vanguard, all their eyes on him. Zavala was the first to speak.
“Arauro-13. The information we are about to discuss does not leave this room. Is that understood?” Arauro gave a simple nod as he walked down the stairs as a picture of Venus came up “Have you heard the legends of the Vault of Glass?”
Arauro stared at them and nodded once “It is a vast collection of unknown weapons, artifacts, and knowledge of the Vex. It is known that a team of guardians ventured in there and only Pahanin returned. Kabr was supposedly corrupted, Osiris thrown forward in time and Praedyth was lost. Either thrown from time or erased entirely. Why do you ask?”
Ikora stepped forward “With much convincing from Lord Saladin… we would like you to lead. Given your actions during twilight gap and your leadership as one of the six fronts, you seem like a good candidate”
Arauro simply nodded as his ghost moved forward “You wish for us to enter the vault, where many guardians have lost their light, alone?”
Zavala shook his head “No. We have selected a number of guardians to accompany you. Here is their-“ Arauro cut him off.
“No. if you wish for me to lead a team into this deathtrap to destroy whatever lies beneath, it is with my team. Otherwise you can find another fool”
Ikora ground her teeth together with a tsk. “Titans…”
Arauro paid her no mind as his focused was centered on Zavala “With all due respect Arauro-13, I cannot allow this.” A figure moved out from the window. His movement was smooth, thought out, graceful even. It was the speaker
“No. Allow this guardian his own team. There is much light and determination flowing from him. He will be able to take on this creature that you all fear” Ikora looked taken aback.
“But Speaker, surely you’re not serious about letting someone with no knowledge of the vault lead a team to its death?”
The speaker turned to him “I am. Zavala. Share your information as well as your other knowledge” he said turning to him. Zavala nodded with a knowing look.
“Very well then Titan. You’re granted authorization on your request. You are allowed to team members. But, we will each be picking someone to send in with you. This is a job for six. Is that understood?” Arauro nodded. The other vanguards returned to their work. Zavala walked away with Arauro to debrief him as well as teach him.
Link to Chapter 2
https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/155941542/0/0/1
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You need to separate your paragraphs. Every speech should be a paragraph on its own, indented. It makes things clearer for the reader, and makes it cleaner too.
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Pretty good! The story is pretty sweet, something you should probably do is paragraph seperation. Around 4-5 sentences per paragraph with only one person speaking per paragraph to avoid confusion. Otherwise it would to lead to walls of text and misleading people about who is speaking.
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Bump it