originally posted in:The Black Garden
Hey guys, bit nervous with putting myself out there with some of the awesome pieces I've seen in this group but I'd like to do my bit (; Plus if you enjoy the read, I would love to do some more that are a bit more in depth so let me know what you think!
Haven't written much before but here she is, an updated version from my original draft:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OQHINRuYoo473CzE3q1BmXxEWhgcnBEmF6rMC0shGCE/edit?usp=sharing
Enjoy (:
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Wow i liked its very good make some more.
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Wow that was some good writing. I really enjoyed it. Just the one thing I found weird was Thomas's death. I feel like it was too sudden. I mean, you might have intended for that, but I personally feel that everyone should get a lot of dialogue to establish their character. That way, when they die, the audience can decide whether they're happy or sad. But hey, that's just me.