Whoops. Fixed! With a single dot.
Added a semicolon there. The word repetition was intentional, simulating someone rushing through what they were saying. It was awkward to read the way it was, though. Needed something heavier than a comma to show the pause after the first one.
Good eye! Thanks for the feedback!
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Your welcome and that's all I could discern from reading it. You did a good job