originally posted in:The Black Garden
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This story didn't seem to be getting much feedback so I thought I'd change the layout. an exert can be found onsite to read more easily now. the whole story (including other chapters) can still be found in the google doc's link.
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Great Stuff, really enjoyable reading! The characters are well defined, I like the short cuts in narrative as well. As Old Mali said previously, could do with some proof-reading.