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originally posted in:The Black Garden
7/14/2013 4:35:55 AM
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you need a hook. and conflict. you do write good though. the story just doesn't draw me in.
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Thanks, I'm used to writing stuff like this but I was so focused the protagonist that I ran out of words. If I had more words I bet I could deliver the hook and conflict you mentioned but word limits have always been the bane of my life.
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Edited by ConVeneer: 7/14/2013 7:15:10 PMyup, that's the challenge. Good-luck. Try writing another.
