I'm sorry to inform you that that was an extremely well made piece of work. But it all seriousness that was a great story. There were a few grammatical errors but they didn't really take away from the experience. I think there were like, three. They weren't major, but I'm a bit of a grammar -insert name of evil WWII soldiers-. I can help you out with that with a group I have. But plot wise, very interested. I want to read more. It seems as though there is going to be a really deep plot. And one more thing, I have this really weird tradition where I quote my favorite sentence from the story. Its just if a sentence amuses me or catches my eye: [quote]Slowly it was inserted into Kohls open wound to shadow his former arm, it seemed to feel as if it snuggled perfectly against his lonely shoulder.[/quote] I just really liked the wordplay in this one. But I'll be looking forward to a finished version! Don't stop writing!