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Itami, recently released from the Tower's medical facilities, brooded quietly in what used to be the Hall of Guardians, his head lowered in a subtle gesture of intense concentration. The place was eerily quiet now that the Vanguards had been disposed of. The Speaker was still gone unfortunately, having disappeared to who knows where. Hopefully, he hadn't left the planet yet, and continued to prove to be one of the greatest mysteries the Tower had to offer. However, he wasn't a priority at the moment. Jadis though...he had never expected her betrayal, at least not so early into the rebellion. She seemed to truly believe in what they were doing, but to take that WARLOCK!
Itami smashed his fist into the heavy oak table, long cracks spreading into the once flawless surface. He needed to get her, he needed to know WHY, but leaving the Tower in such a time of instability would be catastrophic, not to mention that he would probably kill either Tempest or Itami on sight given his recovering state of mind. That's why he had to call HIM.
Itami looked up, just as what he hoped would solve his problems strode into the room.
The Hunter was clothed in the leather armor and flamboyant hooded cape that all members of his class seemed to enjoy. He, however, was an Exo. His skin held an interesting design, as it was colored in random sized splotches of greens and browns. Even though his face held numerous scars from battle, his golden eyes still held the mischievous glint of a truly troublesome child.
"Yamishtin, I have a job for you..."
"Eyyyy, what's up Itami baby! Man it is good to be back in the Tower. I'm always hearing how nasty field rations are. It'll be fun to watch people eating normal meals for a change. By the way, I just went over to that conference hall everybody was talking about. Love what you've done with the place. You know with all the blood and other shit lying around. HEY! You know what would fix that place up? My MIDA--"
"Multi-Tool. Yes it's not like it's the ten thousandth time I've had to listen to you bring up that stupid weapon."
"Stupid! Well, after I'm done with you, you'll be begging for my MIDA. Did you know--"
"100 strange coins each."
Yamishtin's jaw clamped shut as he heard the ridiculous reward for the bounty.
"Who could you find so annoying that you would have to pay someone like me that much cheddar to kill?"
"Jadis and Tempest-0. And I want them captured alive, not killed."
The Exo Hunter frowned at the last name.
"I've never heard of that Exo."
"He doesn't spend a lot of time in the Tower, but you'll know him when you see him. He wields the Thorn."
"Are you sure you don't want them back in bodybags? It'll be a lot easier to do."
"You bring those two back to me alive Yamishtin, or you don't get paid."
"AWWWWWWWW!! How am I supposed track them down anyway?"
"Why don't you use your MIDA Multi Tool?"
"It's gonna take forever to find them. What if I miss Xur?"
Itami covered his eyes with his hands, shaking his head at the anomaly that was Yamishtin.
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This might be just me, but I personally find it a little distracting that all of your characters' names are of those in the group here. I get it, it's a story based on the groups' RP characters, but do you think it would be at all possible to change their names to something else? I have a tough time getting past it, and that's mainly because I've seen everyone around the group chat. That's my constructive criticism for you, different names. Sounds dumb, but I keep getting hung up on it. As for the story itself,I think it's well written and flows smoothly. So, great job on writing it. And again, please don't take offense my feedback. :)